12-03-2018, 02:28 PM
Arlo;4738 Wrote:Thank you, looks better.
Can we maybe break it up a bit? Like so:
c. taking up arms against Lazarene operations which are:
i. conducted in the defence of regions with which we are allies;
ii. within regions with which we are at war;
iii. within regions that are allies of regions with which we are at war and with which we are actively engaged; or
iv. within regions that are protectorates of regions with which we are at war
Maybe change the wording a bit too? Eliminate passive speak etc. For example "regions with which we are allies" could just be "allied regions".
There isn't a legitimate lower level of formatting, but I've made an effort to split up defensive and offensive actions and eliminated passive speech where meaning isn't lost.