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[Proposal] Criminal Code Amendment (December 2018)
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Arlo;4738 Wrote:Thank you, looks better.

Can we maybe break it up a bit? Like so:

c. taking up arms against Lazarene operations which are:
i. conducted in the defence of regions with which we are allies;
ii. within regions with which we are at war;
iii. within regions that are allies of regions with which we are at war and with which we are actively engaged; or
iv. within regions that are protectorates of regions with which we are at war

Maybe change the wording a bit too? Eliminate passive speak etc. For example "regions with which we are allies" could just be "allied regions".

There isn't a legitimate lower level of formatting, but I've made an effort to split up defensive and offensive actions and eliminated passive speech where meaning isn't lost.


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RE: Criminal Code Amendment (December 2018) - by McChimp - 12-03-2018, 02:28 PM

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