07-22-2018, 02:02 PM
I have some in-depth thoughts on this, but I haven't had enough coffee yet to process them coherently. Hopefully later today.
In the meantime, off the top of my head there are a few superficial things that stand out to me. First, I think it would be a good idea for us to try to format our legislation similarly to the way the constitution is formatted, so that we don't have different bills that are formatted very differently -- we don't want people to be confused by the differing formats. I also noticed that the draft includes references to the Phoenix Republic and titles, etc. from the Phoenix Republic draft. I assume that was because this was originally written when the Phoenix Republic draft was still under consideration, but those references will definitely need to be fixed now.
Overall, I think it's a great effort, and I'm sure with revision this can shape up to be a better bill we can pass. Thanks Ryccia!
In the meantime, off the top of my head there are a few superficial things that stand out to me. First, I think it would be a good idea for us to try to format our legislation similarly to the way the constitution is formatted, so that we don't have different bills that are formatted very differently -- we don't want people to be confused by the differing formats. I also noticed that the draft includes references to the Phoenix Republic and titles, etc. from the Phoenix Republic draft. I assume that was because this was originally written when the Phoenix Republic draft was still under consideration, but those references will definitely need to be fixed now.
Overall, I think it's a great effort, and I'm sure with revision this can shape up to be a better bill we can pass. Thanks Ryccia!
Cormac Skollvaldr
"We are all misfits living in a world on fire." - Kelly Clarkson, "People Like Us"
"We are all misfits living in a world on fire." - Kelly Clarkson, "People Like Us"