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Arlo;4733 Wrote:As discussed on Discord -- I'm willing to support I guess if it is at least made more clear that "c" only applies in situations where Lazarus has declared a formal state of war. As explained I feel the current wording is insufficiently clear on that.
Following discord discussions I have tried to specify a list of valid war targets to which the law may be applied.
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12-03-2018, 01:48 PM
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Thank you, looks better.
Can we maybe break it up a bit? Like so:
c. taking up arms against Lazarene operations which are:
i. conducted in the defence of regions with which we are allies;
ii. within regions with which we are at war;
iii. within regions that are allies of regions with which we are at war and with which we are actively engaged; or
iv. within regions that are protectorates of regions with which we are at war
Maybe change the wording a bit too? Eliminate passive speak etc. For example "regions with which we are allies" could just be "allied regions".
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Arlo;4738 Wrote:Thank you, looks better.
Can we maybe break it up a bit? Like so:
c. taking up arms against Lazarene operations which are:
i. conducted in the defence of regions with which we are allies;
ii. within regions with which we are at war;
iii. within regions that are allies of regions with which we are at war and with which we are actively engaged; or
iv. within regions that are protectorates of regions with which we are at war
Maybe change the wording a bit too? Eliminate passive speak etc. For example "regions with which we are allies" could just be "allied regions".
There isn't a legitimate lower level of formatting, but I've made an effort to split up defensive and offensive actions and eliminated passive speech where meaning isn't lost.
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I'm comfortable voting for now.
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I shall second this motion.
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