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[draft] [sc] Commend Imkiville

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(This post was last modified: 05-26-2020, 01:54 PM by Domais.)

Quote:The Security Council,

Duly noting that the government of Imkiville has produced several national and regional artworks that belong in a museum,

Recognizing, Imkiville’s long lasting positive impact on Lazarus, a region torn apart by internal strife. Imkiville successfully overthrew then Delegate of Lazarus Killer Kitty, paving the way for a new government, that would heal many of the wounds from the previous conflict,

Applauding that Imkiville allowed natives that were previously banished to return to Lazarus, while simultaneously allowing those supportive of the previous government to remain,

Adding that even after Imkiville lost the position of World Assembly Delegate of Lazarus it still made contributions to Lazarus,
 
Noting, that the government of Lazarus that Imkiville created is still the government of Lazarus today,

Further recognizing, Inkiville's contributions to the South Pacific serving as Vice-Delegate, Local Councilor and Minister of Military Affairs,

Hereby commends Imkiville.
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Quote:Recognizing, Imkiville’s long lasting positive impact on Lazarus, a region that was split during the government lead ‪Funkadelia‬, ‪Aleister‬, and ‪Killer Kitty‬. Imkiville’s successful overthrow of then Delegate of Lazarus Killer Kitty and its work thereafter of maintaining the new governments stability, and healing many of the wounds caused by the previous administrations,
This could be reworded, perhaps in the following way?
Quote:Recognizing Imkiville’s long lasting positive impact on Lazarus, a region torn apart by internal strife. Imkiville successfully overthrew then Delegate Killer Kitty, paving the way for a new government, that would rebuild Lazarus and heal many of the wounds caused by previous conflicts. Imkiville also greatly contributed to these rebuilding efforts and worked tirelessly to stabilise the region.
Furthermore: 
Quote:Applauding that Imkiville allowed natives that were banished under the previous administrations [font]previously[/font] to return to Lazarus, while simultaneously allowing those supportive of the previous government to remain,
I'd like to see some more meat on the bones on Imki's time with the SPSF - as it stands, it's kind of empty. Also, Imkiville is with an m and not an n Tongue

I'd also like to see some more research done in general, more detail about her work in Lazarus and with the SPSF. But it's good to see this draft, and I hope we can improve it and pass it in order to recognize Imki for her work.
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(This post was last modified: 05-18-2020, 08:37 PM by Debussy.)

Have they made art for lots of people? That may be note worthy.
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(05-18-2020, 03:01 PM)Domais Wrote:
Quote:The Security Council,

Recognizing, Imkiville’s long lasting positive impact on Lazarus, a region torn apart by internal strife. Imkiville successfully overthrew then Delegate of Lazarus Killer Kitty, paving the way for a new government, that would heal many of the wounds from the previous conflict.

Applauding that Imkiville allowed natives that were previously banished to return to Lazarus, while simultaneously allowing those supportive of the previous government to remain,

Adding that even after Imkiville lost the position of World Assembly Delegate of Lazarus it still made contributions to Lazarus,
 
Noting, that the government of Lazarus that Imkiville created is still the government of Lazarus today,

Further recognizing, Inkiville's contributions to the South Pacific serving as Vice-Delegate, Local Councilor and Minister of Military Affairs.

Hereby commends Imkiville.

It’s very short, and needs a lot of expansion. I don’t really like how the first clause is written, it feels very weird. Also what contributions to Lazarus? What did Imkiville do in TSP? (Keep in mind the Hileville coup as well)
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I don't know much about the Hileville Coup, could you fill me in?
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I don't know much about it, but a quick search gives us the statement on it from the side that would ultimately win: https://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic...#p27556402
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Now I just have to write the South Pacific section
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